my narative
December 1st, 2008
One day John, Bill, Frank and Ted desided to join the army.
They were all good friends. John was a short person with blonde hair and wore checkerd shirts and blue jeanshe always had a big smile on his face. Bill was a tall person with dark brown hair and wore brown shirts, gray pants, loved caps and was always grumpy. Frank and Ted were twins the alwaysed hung around with eachother and played games. They both wore green clothesand both had black hair.
When they went to enlist they had to wait an hour before they enlisted. When they got to the frount they asked why they had to wait so long and they said that war had started in america and they had to go help them. When they enlisted they had to go strait to training and first they did shooting. John scored 10, Bill scored 9, Frank scored 12 and Ted scored 11. After the shooting they went to the obstical corse. John got 1:20, Bill got 1:30, Frank got 1:23, and Ted got 1:19. after training they had to go to the boat and go to war. when they got there thier was a big explosion because the base was blown up and they all jumped out of there pants. All that remained was 5 cars. The commander told them to go to the next base.
I will up date this post next time i have an opertunity
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December 2nd, 2008 at 10:08 pm
I think you might need a few capital letters in your narrative, Alex. Otherwise, sounding interesting, will be good to read the next instalment.